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  • As the title says, I have a champ concept sitting in one of my sandbox. To get straight to the point with this sorta copy-paste message, I've been cooking an idea for a "combat medic" champion, but due to being busy, haven't been able to release ideas without fearing that it'll be mostly WIP. Thus, I've opened it up that fellow content creators like you can check it out and, if you wish, edit your own thoughts onto the page. Of course, if possible, put a comment at the bottom of the page like the old talk page style or in the edit-submission-comment section so I know intentions.

    The link to the sandbox is here. Thank you and I hope to see a livelihood in the sandbox.

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    • Heya! Thank you for reaching out to me and for including me in this project! I'd very much like to help, as I too think the idea of a combat medic has potential in League.

      Before I talk about your kit, I think it's also worth looking at combat medics from other games and seeing how they achieve their playstyle: Heroes of the Storm has Lt. Morales, for example, who while being more of a traditional healer, also has some offensive power via knockback grenades, as well as a persistent healing beam that lets her focus on her own positioning. Overwatch has Moira, a character balanced between offensive power and healing, who has to deal damage in order to heal her allies. Going even further back, Team Fortress 2 has the Medic, a healing-focused class who nonetheless possesses decent offensive power on the side. In this respect, and from what I've seen in your kit, I think the goal should likely be to not only create a fighting support, but one whose combat power and utility are dependent upon each other, in order to get the full combat medic feel (which can be achievable as a Controller/Warden hybrid, and not just a utility/damage-dealer hybrid as in the above cases).

      And now, with that said, here are my thoughts on your kit thus far:

      • Right off the bat, the innate is my least favorite part of the kit. It's a persistent bonus that offers situational power but no gameplay whatsoever, which I think is a completely wasted opportunity on a champion who could otherwise have a host of different tools at their disposal. If you really want to keep the damage reduction effect, I suggest changing it to become adaptive: for example, have Nevon periodically adapt to the largest instance of damage he took in the past few seconds, becoming resistant to it, and have him apply that resistance to allies he uses his abilities on. That way, he'd be encouraged to tank in order to provide more tailored protection.
      • Terra Mine looks excellent, and I think could be a great fit for this kind of champion. No major criticisms here.
      • Progressive Remedy's surplus mechanic is interesting, though there are a few too many stacking/CDR mechanics on one ability here as well. If you want a heal that only becomes powerful if held over a duration, simply make the base cooldown very low and the cost high, while keeping the surplus mechanic. Additionally, I think it might help to make Surplus generation dependent upon Nevon's tanking ability (e.g. him tanking damage could generate Surplus stacks), rather than just pure cooldowns. Because Nevon is designed to help allies, I think it might also be better to make him automatically benefit from the heal if he casts it on an ally, just like Nunu and Mordekaiser's ally buffs.
      • Endurant Bastion's basic idea of charging up to a shield that provides CC immunity is a great one, imo, and in fact I think you could streamline it to just that, and do away with the autoattack modifier. As with Progressive Remedy, I think it could be worth allowing Nevon to cast the effect onto an ally while benefiting from it, so long as the two share the same shield pool.
      • Concentration to me doesn't really fit in Nevon's kit, even if it could be good on another champion. I would suggest finding an ultimate that isn't a pure personal offensive steroid on what is meant to be a Controller/Warden hybrid (neither class really focuses on raw personal damage output). In fact, it might even be worth moving Endurant Bastion up to the ult slot and having it function a bit like an Ubercharge, providing a huge shield and CC immunity to both Nevon and his target for a short period of time. Meanwhile, if you really want an on-hit effect, a long time ago I too worked on a combat medic concept, and one of the champion's abilities involved temporarily causing their attacks to sedate their targets, applying a slow that would turn into a stun if stacked enough times. This could be a way of adding offensive power in a manner that would be appropriate for a Controller/Warden.

      Overall, there's a very solid base to be had in your concept, and while a few abilities could use adjustments, the core is there already, I think. Best of luck with your work on this, and please let me know how you progress on it and if I can help in any way, as I'd love to continue participating in this project!

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    • Hello, Will. Apologies on not keep you up to date.

      I did wish to let you know that I've made some changes on the kit, with some of your ideas taken for it. If there are anything that appeals or bothers you, please comment. Also, I'm currently in search of a new ult, since as you say, the old one doesn't fit much to his kit. Not anymore that is since his E doesn't offer AA enhancements anymore.

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    • No worries at all! Thank you for the reminder, as well.

      Looking at the current kit, there's very little I can criticize. All of the basic abilities look solid and each have a clear purpose, and I think you've fleshed Nevon out to such a degree that his niche is immediately recognizable and potentially very enjoyable. Congratulations on the work you've accomplished!

      Regarding the ult, I'm kind of thinking about Orisa from Overwatch: she's defined as an "anchor tank", i.e. a tank who naturally makes her allies group around her, and is rewarded for setting up a security perimeter. Her ult pushes that further by providing a static objective that gives everyone nearby a damage boost. I still don't think Nevon should have damage, but I think you could have a similar effect for his own ult. For example:

      R - Stim Dispenser: Nevon deploys a static device that lasts for a few seconds on the field. Nevon and all allies near the Stim Dispenser have their cooldown recharge rate (not cooldown reduction) and resource generation drastically increased (100 / 150 / 200% ?). The device can be targeted by enemies, scales with Nevon's health, and is destroyed if it takes enough damage.

      The idea here being that Nevon creates a static zone of significant power that could allow allies to hold the fort, while potentially also synergizing quite well with mages casting from the back line. The specifics of the bonuses can obviously change, but the idea here is that the dispenser should be able to provide a lot of power, but shouldn't be able to survive too long unless you take the time to set up the area around it with Terra Mines and Allocated Bulwark. Additionally, having any kind of bonus-granting object would naturally synergize with his innate. What do you think?

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    • Oooh my. I thank you for the compliment. I don't think I could have gotten this far with his kit without the help of editors/content creators who have given their pitch for Nevon. I just hope his niche is not only recognizable and enjoyable, but to a given degree something people may consider as viable.

      "Stim Dispenser" sounds like a terrific idea, seeing that thus far, while Nevon does have a destructible object he places down with Q, it's not a buff "totem" as I would call it, such as Demacian Standard Demacian Standard. I may change some items up, such as adding certain aspects so that Stim Dispenser has other benefits in the late game (?), while touching on potential lore aspects, such as the newer idea of him being a botanist and likely using some aroma therapy through Stim Dispenser. But overall, Stim Dispenser on its own is looking appealing ^w^

      While I do agree that this R synergizes with the "patient" mechanic of the innate, E provides that capability, as it will also affect allies within the bounds of the shield if the "Yasuo perimeter" style barrier is chosen. But it doesn't change the appeal of the ability.

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  • Well I have made some big changes from last time you commented and I hope you have time to check it out and give some feedback.

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  • According to the on-hit effects page, lifesteal is applied to all on-hit physical damage. Is this wrong or is Blade of the Ruined King item BotRK's first passive just useless? ("Life steal applies to damage dealt by this item's passive.")

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    • That line is very likely a relic, and I think it can be removed safely. There used to be a time where BotRK's on-hit damage specifically didn't trigger life steal, and that was then changed, so it's likely its pre-change state was just a special case.

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    • Gotcha, I removed it.

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  • I was looking around and saw that you are very experienced at making custom items, and was wondering what you thought of my custom item concept and what I could do to improve, any feedbackhelps and I would really appreciate it from someone so good at making custom items.

    Here is the link to the Hilted Dagger item line 

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    • Thank you for messaging me! I left a review on your blog post, and am happy to provide further feedback and suggestions if you'd like. If there's anything you'd like to talk about, feel free to message me here.

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    • I am glad to get your feedback and it has given me some good ideas and I have updated my post with some of those ideas so you can you check it out if you feel like it.

      And I am glad that there are some very nice people like yourself on the wikia.

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    • Flattery will get you anywhere. ;)

      In seriousness, though, it's a pleasure to give feedback, especially since you've dedicated yourself to improving your concept over time, which not everyone does on here. I left a reply on your blog, and I look forward to seeing more of your work.

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  • I wanted to do a real infographic on stealth and vision this time.

    I was thinking about including:

    • No. of brush on SR. (36. And talking about how they give every champion access to invisibility by their functionality.)
    • No. of champions with invisibility. (14 of them, going by my own definition and not Riot's. Ivern, Quinn, Graves, & Nocturne are all champions who can go invisible, even though people don't traditionally thing of it as invis.)
    • No. of posts on the Boards and Reddit about a vision-centric support champ. (It's a lot.)
    • No. of posts on the Boards and Reddit about a Watcher champion.
    • Pointing out how neither EvelynnSquare Evelynn nor TwitchSquare Twitch have unique SFX / audio cues that herald their approach / reveal their prescence. (Going to call it 'The Sound of Silence'.)
    • Origin of True Sight (as a call-back to my previous 'infographic'.)
    • Champion with the most vision-manipulation abilities. (ShacoSquare Shaco!)
    • Point out how there are a number of instances where True Sight and Normal Sight are given the same indicator, and how this isn't good for Clarity Clarity. (Example: CaitlynSquare Caitlyn's Yordle Snap Trap Yordle Snap Trap and JinxSquare Jinx's Zap! Zap! both have the same icon, but Cait's is True Sight icon True Sight.
    • Quotes from the developers of Thief Trilogy, Dishonored, Mark of the Ninja, and other stealth games about their systems and approach.
    • Champion with the most tells and clues inherent to their stealth. (RengarSquare Rengar with 3 total: his unique warning indicator, unique SFX, and his reveal by proximity.)
    • Champion with the longest lasting Sight icon sight reveal. (Which I believe is OriannaSquare Orianna since her Ball can remain a fair distance away indefinitely, its like having an ever-lasting ward and highlights her supportive nature.)
    • Pointing out that the icons floating above a ward is the ward, not the body / model of the object itself.
    • Maybe highlighting AsheSquare Ashe, KalistaSquare Kalista, and QuinnSquare Quinn as having powerful vision tools built into their kit.
    • Talk about detection effects like Rek'SaiSquare Rek'Sai Tremor Sense as being super awesome and hint / imply that WarwickSquare Warwick's Blood Scent Blood Scent gets a similar treatment.
    • Talk about how 'stealth' wards have very little inherent counterplay. (They don't become visible at close range, there is no cone of sight to outmaneuver, they don't have any sort of audio cue or warning indicator that would give them away. Basically, the crux of your Another Look At Vision post. How wards limit organic gameplay because Riot's design necessitates the need for a specific item in order to interact with the ward.)

    These are all the ones that immediately come to mind, is there anything I'm missing? What do you think I should add? How can I draw attention to the info war and stealth aspects of League?

    I also wanted to look at other RTS games and see what kind of vision / info / stealth / invis elements they incorporate and how they play out. Things like Warcraft, Starcraft, Age of Empires, Civilization, etc. etc. but (surprisingly?) virtually no RTS that I've looked up (I haven't really dug deep, and I can't get my hands on these games to test them) has explored vision / invis like League has. (There was an old game called Demigod that came out a year before League released and it has no vision-manipulation gameplay elements, IIRC. Just an example.)

    Which is to say, I think League is the most advanced stealth-action MOBA / RTS game in existence right now. None of its competitors / clones comes close to it. Even DotA2, which many will say does invis and sight better than League, has less instances of both and less varied iterations of both from what I've seen.

    I feel the need to point this out to Riot, because their game fundamentally has stealth as a core component. And I mean stealth in the true sense of the word - you don't want to be seen, or give away unnecessary info of your presence and whereabouts to hostiles, just like in Thief, Dishonored, and Mark of the Ninja.

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    • Sorry for the long delay. I have no excuses.

      Your last line paragraph is exactly it. There are so many things Riot could do, if only they would do them. They would make this game so much richer, because the whole sight-stealth dynamic, this gameplay of getting intel and using it and preparing ambushes and psyching out the enemy is the least explored design space, right? And the gameplay around it thus far seems to be very... IDK how to put it. Minimal? I see the enemy with a ward in inventory, they wander off out of sight, the ward is no longer in their inventory - I know they've warded, but beyond relaying that info to my jungler, their is no way to avoid that ward beyond just choosing another gank path or using invis?

      I don't think Riot would do away with wards. Ward skins, if only a tiny part, do profit Riot. The jungle would also feel cluttered (potentially, maybe) with all of these plants. It'd be one thing if Riot had made all the plants associated with vision at the start, but going back and adding new plants specifically for vision while we still have the Honey Fruit and Blast Cone (the non-vision plants) seems . . . wierd to me. (I have this thing about designs that I want them to be perfect from the start, if possible. I don't like ret-con'ing or errata'ing things.)

      I do like the idea though, and your ideas specifically are fine. You bring up a point though: "sight wards are really terrible at conveying their power, especially at lower elos, and their own invisibility just makes things worse." Riot has to put emphasis on how their game is a stealth-action game, as stealth is a fundamental part of it. To quote Sven Bergström who wrote A 2014 Manifesto: Does The Stealth Genre Even Exist? :

      There are almost no “pure” stealth games, but there are many many action games with stealth mechanics. Thus, the stealth genre does not exist. Stealth games were born in action, from which they grow – and still remain.
      — Sven Berstrom


      This goes back to something you mentioned earlier, about there being a limited number of states (I assume you mean alarm levels?) the level and NPCs could be in. That's what makes or breaks single-player stealth games. How advanced the AI is, how they respond to your actions and changes in the world, how they respond when your position is compromised are all really important things. The biggest one is probably this: the stealth failure state. Once the player has failed stealth, the NPCs will chase him until 1) he dies, 2) he kills or disables them, 3) he somehow resumes being stealthed. In most stealth games (I've been thinking about Thief: The Dark Project as I talk about this example) the world-state can eventually become 'solved'. You can KO all the guards and they'll never wake up. Resuming stealth is often as easy as ducking out of sight for a few seconds and then the guards forget all about you. Even if they don't forget, rarely do they alert / inform other guards (the reverse of this is all the guards operating with a hive-mind regardless of distance or proximity, which is not an enjoyable experience) or leave a predetermined area.

      But the stealth failure state in League is combat which is the driving force behind the gameplay. Failing stealth (while probably not good for you or your team) doesn't result in the game-world progressing towards 'solved' status. And dying returns the player to the stealth state. And it works this way for both teams.

      I guess I'm just rambling at this point - I'm not sure what my point was - but Riot needs to give us enough vision options that we can 1) create a multilayered defensive information system (I called this a 'network of vision' earlier, similar to an obstacle course that demands precise timing and careful cautious movements to avoid being seen / detected, i.e. stealth); 2) ways of gaining vision 'offensively' - scouting, gaining information, misleading enemies; 3) ways to avoid and preempt both 1 & 2, preferably by telegraphing and good clarity. All of your plant options meet these criteria, which is great. (The 'lantern' plant is the possible exception - it seems like you can only use it for no.2, as it can't be 'set up' to provide a defensive line of vision.)

      I'm still very partial to trinkets, and I would love to see Riot trim the fat from the trinket system (remove the upgrades) and really focus on giving us specific and defined vision tools. For example, I think the Sweeping Lens is great for scouting and anti-invis detection purposes, but in my ideal world I'd have the 'disable wards and traps' be another trinket entirely. I don't like how the Scrying Orb upgrade places a ward - I'd much rather it hold more charges to allow multiple quick peeks of key locations (this also gives makes it useful during a chase, as dropping wards over walls and into brush during a chase would be replaced by multiple activations of the Orb.)

      I feel like I'm just repeating myself, not that I don't enjoy talking about stealth and coming up with cool ideas that enable stealth gameplay. I've still got so much work to do in that regard, and I don't want to bore you. Again, sorry for the delayed response. X.X

      P.S. I just remembered my point about the stealth failure state and League and multiplayer: there are several stealth game designers who've all said that multiplayer is the way of the future for stealth. :D

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    • LivesByProxy wrote: And the gameplay around it thus far seems to be very... IDK how to put it. Minimal? I see the enemy with a ward in inventory, they wander off out of sight, the ward is no longer in their inventory - I know they've warded, but beyond relaying that info to my jungler, their is no way to avoid that ward beyond just choosing another gank path or using invis?

      I agree, I'd say the issue with information-based gameplay in League is that it's not all that deep, on top of often being poorly conveyed. Ideally, if someone dropped a ward, that would offer gameplay to play with it, i.e. take time to destroy it, wait it out, or take another path, but often all of that just boils down to not going through a certain area for an extended period of time. It's both predictable and unpredictable for the wrong reasons (you generally know what's being warded and when, but don't have enough information to make nuanced plays around it).

      LivesByProxy wrote: Ward skins, if only a tiny part, do profit Riot.

      This is surprisingly a fairly large consideration I hadn't thought of, yeah. It frustrates me especially that Riot would tie priced cosmetics to items that have experienced massive variation over time, as it also hinders potential gameplay improvements in the above case. Perhaps there's room for compromise, though, and both the ward pods and Scuttle Crab shrines could keep the skin, though ultimately I think those cosmetics might just be worth abandoning in the end, even on Live, since wards are way too unstable to use as a monetary resource.

      LivesByProxy wrote: The jungle would also feel cluttered (potentially, maybe) with all of these plants. It'd be one thing if Riot had made all the plants associated with vision at the start, but going back and adding new plants specifically for vision while we still have the Honey Fruit and Blast Cone (the non-vision plants) seems . . . wierd to me.

      The ideal I had in mind was that the jungle would feel like this alive place, with something interesting to do at most major locations, but wouldn't have, say, two plants right next to each other or the like. Currently, plants only take up a tiny portion of the jungle, and leave massive holes to be filled in, particularly around top and bot lanes. I also feel there might be room for more power-ups besides vision, but since sight is itself tremendously useful, powerful and potentially versatile, I think it deserves to be expressed in more ways than, say, a knockback or a heal.

      The other part to this is that I think it would be acceptable for the jungle to be more complicated if it were merely a shift in complexity, as it would involve the removal of wards and trinkets. While it's understandable to want perfect systems from the very start (I definitely get the same feeling), League itself is a massive system constantly in evolution, and none of it has ever remained unchanged. Most systems also tend to play out very different in practice from what they would in theory, which is what opens up opportunities for improvements.

      LivesByProxy wrote: This goes back to something you mentioned earlier, about there being a limited number of states (I assume you mean alarm levels?) the level and NPCs could be in.

      What I meant was that singleplayer stealth games have a finite amount of action states: basically, at every state you're in, i.e. position, resources, time, there's a limited, predictable number of things you can do based on complete information, since the environment and AI around you is also fully predictable. Every singleplayer level therefore starts out with a limited amount of action states, which you then usually reduce (i.e. by taking out and hiding enemies) down to just one or a handful, which usually tends to be a "safe" set of states in which nothing you do will generate alerts or force you to redo anything.

      To a degree, that last "safe" state is somewhat desirable to some -- you've beaten the level, and get to feel your achievement by switching from careful, restricted movement to much faster and more open mobility. Some of my favorite moments from Deus Ex and Dishonored came from being able to fully explore a level I could previously only tiptoe through. Because of this, though, singleplayer stealth games have run into a formula, one that manifesto points out, in that you end up with stealth games whose end objective ends up being to no longer be stealthy, and so through actions that violate "true" stealth, i.e. knocking out or killing enemies, and thereby leaving traces. Enemy AI needs to be predictable and forgetful in those games, and usually the default action upon failure is often to just reload a previous save point. This ends up creating a genre that is much shallower than it could be, one that is stuck in its own tropes.

      Because of this, I agree that multiplayer and/or procedurally-generated stealth games are an evolution that needs to happen on a much larger scale, because those generate the kinds of environments where you don't have complete information at any given time, where you can't just reload a save or wait for the enemy to reset if you get detected, and where there may never be a solved status where stealth just doesn't matter thereafter. League fills all of these criteria, as you mentioned, so it's really a matter of implementing stealth, rather than just invisibility, in a manner that adds gameplay for everyone.

      LivesByProxy wrote: I guess I'm just rambling at this point - I'm not sure what my point was - but Riot needs to give us enough vision options that we can 1) create a multilayered defensive information system (I called this a 'network of vision' earlier, similar to an obstacle course that demands precise timing and careful cautious movements to avoid being seen / detected, i.e. stealth); 2) ways of gaining vision 'offensively' - scouting, gaining information, misleading enemies; 3) ways to avoid and preempt both 1 & 2, preferably by telegraphing and good clarity. All of your plant options meet these criteria, which is great. (The 'lantern' plant is the possible exception - it seems like you can only use it for no.2, as it can't be 'set up' to provide a defensive line of vision.)

      I'd say the lantern plant does both 1 and 2, since it's a static, permanent objective that can be used both defensively (you can use it to guard your own jungle for a limited duration) and offensively (it can see through nearby brush). Ideally, all of those plants should also fulfill criterion number 3, since they'd appear at set locations and respawn at predictable intervals once consumed (plus their growth would indicate how long until they reappear). I agree with the objectives you've set out, though I also think it's worth pointing out that vision, by nature, always has both an offensive and defensive component: revealing an area lets you know a path is safe to take, which both gives you more security when navigating the map, and an edge when trying to ambush your opponent.

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  • If you even can. This is the science.

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  • Also, I was rereading your 'Another Look At Vision' (again) and I just came to the realization that 1) removing SightStone (as you suggest) would be good for the game, and 2) you're line here: "The current vision system is one defined by hard counters with gameplay focused exclusively around the interaction between a couple of items, rather than between wards and players" just hits it home - this is still the case, no?

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    • Yep, I still think that's the case, and to answer the title question, I'm not a big fan of control wards. They're awkwardly designed, and in spite of the ward disabling effect, feel mostly like an attempt at vision wards minus invisibility detection. The addition of camouflage was the perfect opportunity to add it to stealth wards, and make warding and counter-warding far more organic. Instead, we're still down to two ward types that achieve mostly the same thing, with one ward's main purpose explicitly being to one-up the other. Giving camouflage to stealth wards and traps would mean no need for control wards or red trinket, which would mean no need for Sightstone.

      While I personally believe that a vision game with only yellow trinket would be good enough, I feel that, at the very least, condensing vision items down to that would be a good starting point for expanding the vision game properly, e.g. with the wards and mechanics you have proposed. If we are to have multiple tools for approaching vision, those tools need to be distinct, and they need to stand out on their own merits, not just counter each other.

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  • How are you? What's your thoughts on this preseason, the assassins, Alistar's mini-rework and that stuff? :D

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    • I'm doing well! How've you been? It's been a long time.

      Overall, I'm really liking this preseason. There's a ton of stuff that's coming up that the playerbase has been expecting for years (i.e. replays, the new client, etc.), and the gameplay updates are mostly great too.

      I've playtested three of the main assassin reworks (everyone except Rengar, who's disabled at the moment), as well as Akali and Alistar's mini-reworks, and I really like all of them. The updated kits are really fun to use, and feel both powerful and richer in counterplay. Thoughts on each one of them:

      • Akali's new passive makes a fair difference in how she plays, and I feel makes her more interesting. Her E is still boring, and she still has issues, but overall it's a big improvement.
      • Alistar's changes look like he just got his passive and E swapped, but he actually plays really differently now. The new Trample really makes you want to stay near enemies after diving them, and stunning enemies with it is really satisfying, as is landing heals after full-team knockups. His overall damage feels terrible, though, which I guess is fine, considering he's not meant to be damage-heavy.
      • Kat's probably the "clunkiest" of the main reworks so far, but only because her rework really drastically changes the way she plays, so you faceplant if you try to play her the same way as live Kat. You basically need to lay a dagger down with W first before diving your opponent most of the time, but besides that she can deal incredible damage and has much better base mobility if you prepare accordingly, despite the loss of her ward jumping. She'll take some getting used to, but is a lot of fun.
      • LeBlanc's much less of a bully, but despite that it feels like she deals even more damage because of her new passive. Her new R is pretty complex, and has its own learning curve, but using her Mimic properly really feels like you're playing mindgames on your opponent.
      • Talon is probably my favorite of the main reworked assassins, mainly because of his parkour. The animation looks awesome and the gameplay is surprisingly new, even though it's also fairly intuitive. The rank 1 cooldown on his E is a bit high, so hopefully that'll get lowered. Other than that, his W feels even stronger and his new Q is interesting to use.

      Besides that, the item changes seem pretty cool, though I haven't tried all of the new items in great depth. I'm not a fan of the Lethality stat, since the behind-the-scenes formula for the armor pen calculation means any number you get on an item feels arbitrary, and I'm not looking forward to the plants, but hopefully both of them will feel better over time once we all get used to them.

      By the way, if you're still doing champion bios, I'm still in. The mage update, and now the assassin update were perfect for giving not-so-well-defined champions a niche, and I think we could use this preseason to give the project a boost.

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    • Well, that was more in-depth than I expected. Glad to see you're liking most of them, I can't wait to test them out.

      As for the bios, I'd love to continue the project at some point, though right now I'm super busy with college. We'll see about it :)

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  • Hi Will,

    I was just wondering if you have time to help me with my Champion concept before i release it. please do tell me if you have time so i can show it to you

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    • I'd love to help! Point me to your concept and I'll give as much feedback as you'd like.

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    • Have you ever felt the light?
      
      Its shimmering light, showering you with comfort and warmth. It feels good, doesn't it? To bathe in it for as long as you could ever wish to, you would be willing to do everything it tells you - every command, every order and every word it whispers - you hang onto it as if it's the air that your lungs survive upon. Like the earth beneath your feet that keeps you from falling. Like the blood in your body that keeps your heart beating... and alive.
      
      But.
      
      I reckon that you have never felt its burn.
      
      It is easy to forget... or should I better say, its easy to dismiss it... the way it punishes you, only to lure you back in again... the way it blinds your eyes, although you continue to let your eyes remain open to its luminescence... the way it stings you, yet again bathe you in the light you so love... 
      
      You will strive... harder and harder to make sure you are never punished again. But that's not going to be enough... your best will never be enough... when you feel like you have finally accomplished the impossible, it will tear you down... scorn your stupidity... reprimand you for taking so long on such a simple task.
      
      But like a demonic angel... it will comfort you, telling you to do another task to prove that you are worthy of its sanctuary. And this process will toil on, day after day, year after year. The same endless cycle...
      
      It will tell you to get better... to keep getting better. And you will, to the best of your ability, pushing every limit within your body for the sake of its warmth and love. For every ounce of sweat your body drips, you believe you will be rewarded just as much more...
      
      Eventually though... just like that one day, as I stood in wait for it... it will disappear from you. Vanish without a trace. Not even a single word of farewell or reassurance... as if it never cared that you existed, although you needed it most.
      
      At such a time...
      
      What would you do? 
      
      I live my life now, in my own city, in my own realm, in my own Domain.
      
      No longer will I tolerate such cruelty. The light is nothing more than a trap... a temptress, luring you in with an addictive honey to only capture you in its shackles. And as long as you are in those shackles, it will tell you sweet words that deceive you at every corner. Even if you know there is no truth in what it tells you, unfounded hope keeps you from doubting them in the end. Even though it gives nothing in return for your efforts that you have given. Those sweet words never promised a single reward in the first place, yet you are attracted by the possible surprise it may offer. That it will at the least say to you, "well done." 
      
      But... it pays no respect to you, treating you nothing more than a hollow existence. A puppet to its fancy show...
      
      Thus... I no longer care for it...
      
      So, hear me now, Agents of the light.
      
      You are not welcomed to my kingdom.
      
      Any light that dares try to illuminate my realm will be snuffed out by not only me, but by also the darkness its dares expel.
      
      You may believe that the Darkness... is cruel or scary. But I inform you, it is neither cruel or scary. While it may tell you the cold hard truth, it does that so that you are in mindful of the situation. And it is up to you on how to react to this newfound knowledge.
      
      And I will tell you: I am not evil.
      
      I do not seek the servitude of others under me, nor do I revel in their pain and suffering.
      
      I am not chaos.
      
      I do not desire to shake the order of this world out of balance, nor do I wish to cause a ruckus in every corner of this universe.
      
      Then what am I?
      
      I am Darkness Incarnate.
      
      I do not hold the innate impulse to kill anyone. But... I will if the light dares stay after I have made my warning. I do only wish to live peacefully on my own, but I also welcome those who no longer wants to associate themselves to the light.
      
      I am Darkness.
      
      My World... My City... My Realm... they embody the black depths, for it is a sanctuary. A sanctuary away from the sun that forcefully hails in the sky during the day. A sanctuary where the moon no longer guides lost travelers with its falsehood. We wish to have nothing do with these artifacts.
      
      I... do not bring anybody down. I offer all the pleasures the light has to offer without dragging along its cruelty. When somebody is hurt, I cure them. When somebody has fallen, I help them off the ground. When somebody feels oppressed, I will spread my arms, welcoming them into the embrace of my community.
      
      But even with such kindness, I will not tolerate anything associated with the light. Those who wish to cause a rebellion, something the light created to cause a discord within the darkness, I will immediately purge you from my city. Those who wish to start religion, something the light created to control the minds of commoners with false truth, I will be banish you out of my realm. And for those who wish to spread the light... will be given the greatest of punishment I can offer for their crimes.
      
      The Penalty Game.
      
      I wish for the people who embrace the same darkness I cherish to grow just like I did, but without having to go through all the trials and tribulations... all the pain and suffering... all the wrong turns I had made to reach where I am now. I wish for them to be feel empowered... be capable... think for themselves so that they can face every adversary without losing their innocence. If they have found the same salvation I had found in the darkness, I will protect them against the light and spare them all deceit it is swollen with.
      
      Now, who am I again?
      
      I am the Protector of the Ebony. The Herald of the Black Crown. The Harbinger of the Shadows. 
      
      I am Darkness Incarnate.
      
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    • that is the story the champion is based on and here is a kit I fleshed out with the help of GreenMoriyama http://leagueoflegends.wikia.com/wiki/User:Chase999/Sandbox2?venotify=created&useskin=oasis

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    • I like the core idea of shifting forms based on specific domains. However, my number one complaint is that your kit is just too wordy. It took me some time to read through the whole thing, and more time to understand exactly what was going on, especially since there were several buffs and debuffs that applied to multiple abilities but weren't phrased too clearly. Without even needing to take anything away from the kit, you can phrase everything more efficiently. For the passive, for example, I'd take out the details and instead create a separate section for Crystals of Darkness, with the passive description only painting the broad lines of what they do (e.g. "Erebus has his own trinket that creates special wards, which transport any enemy who gets too close to his domain").

      My other big criticism is that the kit looks like it lacks direction, and some components don't really feel like they'd be intuitive in an actual in-game scenario (i.e. disarming oneself to reset an ally's autoattack timer, which is very mechanical and not thematic at all). Some effects, like Beloved Ward and Devourer of Light, both have great core themes, and I think you should focus on making Erebus a vision-manipulating support. Here's more detailed feedback for each ability:

      • Domain of Erebus needs to be streamlined. The core idea is brilliant, but nobody reading your kit at first glance is going to care about how your champion's special wards' health works. Since these Crystals of Darkness are objects, I'd make a separate section describing their details, and would reserve the passive description for the barest essentials.
      • Stygian Prosperity doesn't look interesting. I don't think resetting any autoattack timer, let alone an ally's, should ever be the focus of an ability. This ability is basically a more complicated Sheen proc for an ally, and I think there are many more interesting things that can be done here.
      • I like Beloved Ward connecting Erebus to his ally, but again, on-hit damage just feels meh. Perhaps you could capitalize on the movement speed when moving towards each other and make it a constant buff. I also think mentioning Nefarious Warden here feels weird, since the effect is described in a separate section and is a complicated debuff, and I personally don't quite see what it's meant to do here.
      • Devourer of Light is a great ability. I'd streamline it a little bit by making the zone a proper Erebus's Domain and making it stick to the target, but the core idea is quite good.
      • Blade of Dusk's wording is a bit weird. Is it just one attack, or does it last for a duration? I'm also not sure what it's meant to do in the grander scheme of things: is Erebus meant to turn into a fighter when inside his domain?
      • Imprisoning Charge looks good, though I think you could again simplify the effect down to preventing Prisoners of the Dark from leaving Erebus's Domain by any means. Also, if the effect deals damage, you might want to indicate it.
      • Nefarious Warden looks like a bunch of different effects strung up together, and doesn't really seem all that cohesive to me: what's it meant to achieve? What's the intended gameplay? Having it as a bonus you can activate from multiple sources makes it seem like it's an important part of Erebus's kit, but I don't really see what kind of impact it's intended to make.
      • "Penalty Game" doesn't sound like an appropriate title, and sounds like something out of soccer/football. The effect itself looks really fiddly, and the payoff is basically three different flavors of bonus damage, which I don't think is worth it. I'd look for something else, if there needs to be an ultimate for when Erebus is inside his domain.

      Overall, you have a great core concept, but also a lot of work to do to polish your kit, and build it into something with more cohesion and interesting gameplay hooks. I'm here to help, and whatever I can do to contribute, whether it's give feedback, suggestions, etc., don't hesitate to ask.

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