User blog comment:ArtMaster7/Stilerion the Dragon Breeder/@comment-3391671-20170909182626

Hmmm... so you aimed for the ever famous "pure blood vs half blood" issue. Not bad. However, the implementation of the backstory has a bit too many plot holes (why didn't Stil hide family or friends in his cellar too?) along with story choices that spurs some obvious biases (story sounds setup to make dragons seem villainous and Drake people the good). Then there is the vengeance that is all but cliche, as if ever hero has to have lost their loved ones, and want to spell death, regardless of their personality. Does become flat when so many characters, both canon and custom, follow this model. Makes such stories to be clickbait-y in the sense of "boohoo, look at him so sad cuz he lost family, thus justifies why they are now a recognizable MC." Could use some brushing up as to the internal conflicts and other parts of making a more convincing story.

These are all due process in becoming a better writer, so just wished to make comments about these. Will get onto the entire kit when I have the time, but for now, I'm conflicted if I'm being sexist to think male drakes cannot lay eggs...