User blog comment:Nhan-Fiction/(Custom, Fan-Made Champion) Kiya, the Fervor of the Sands/@comment-68.84.114.146-20121223051443

Somewhat late champion review from Dzanio:

First off, cute champ, I’m sure she’d be popular.

Passive: I’d add an “at level 18” description to the items for ease of review. Rank 2 Wondrous Scepter seems underpowered; you’d have to be over level 10 to see benefits equivalent to buying a ruby crystal and sapphire crystal (sum less than the cost of this item). The bonus kill/assist gold doesn’t seem particularly helpful. Abilities are balanced around the item, so I don’t think the item has to be balanced w/ the effect it has on abilities (other than AP scaling, etc) in mind.

Q: Rather high missile speed; most skill shots are a little over half this value. Flat reduction values are too high; should cap around 15. Damage values/utility more appropriate for a single target spell. Good Ap carry, or support skill.

W: Nifty; had originally envisioned a support or ranged mid champ; I’m guessing melee bruiser/assassin now.

E: Back to support. Lifesteal/Spell vamp %ages too high; cap around 12% is more in line w/ similar abilities.

R:   The ap ratio on the heal is a bit much; you’re looking at around 40 hp/s, which for 10 seconds, which is ridiculously nice (This is a significant fraction of a Mundo ult/target w/ a 1000 AoE), and the AoE is exhorbitantly huge (Ignoring the base heal). Also think the mana gain feature would be hard to balance. Duration on this is a bit high. Active: Well I can see why you’d add the mana gain w/ this, although a better way to balance it would be to not have the mana gain, and set a limit to how many times this ability can activate. One cat/summon would be more appropriate for the damage/slow amount. I would give a small cooldown between each recasting of this ability so you don’t accidentally waste ticks when the server lags. High AP scaling considering. (for the current balancing on this ability you don’t mention how Kiya regains stacks of cats). This is a super support and super APC ability all in one; I would focus it towards one or the other.

General Comment: Your champion lacks focus, she has 4 abilities, and they’re all aimed at doing completely unrelated tasks. You should decide what her role is, and build her abilities around that.