Thread:GreenMoriyama/@comment-4091261-20170804034240/@comment-4091261-20170804051752

I have a couple elements I expect out of Zara.
 * Slow, but powerful.
 * Level dependent.
 * Extreme base damage.
 * Unique form of tankiness.

In reaching these expectations, I got a lot of feedback saying I went too far in each direction. I agree that he became numerically awkward due to this and made adjustments appropriate to his character.

That said, during my slew of changes, I somehow changed my perspective entirely by giving him ratios for him to fit better as a League of Legends champion.

As such, I deviated from my initial expectations. Since I engrossed myself, in all these patches, I would like a review on how he looks as a whole champion in game. Somewhere along the way, I lost the ability to see how the whole kit would function when put together.

The lore is also another enigma for me. I put together a powerful story that explains many things without intruding on the present given that the chronology is in a time before many critical events in Runeterra. So if things happen to change in League of Legends actual game, this is a time before many of these changes occur.

When had someone else read the lore, he stated very consistently that the first chapter is the best one. I didn't know if it was personal preference until he stated that the seventh chapter was close to the best one. So, I concluded there was a physical issue with how I presented the story.

As such, I want to assess how the story flows. Specifically matters like speed, density, and cohesion. I would also like an opinion on some choices I made when writing:
 * Omitting instances of "{insert name here} said" or "asked {insert name here}"
 * Paradigm shifts and perspective changes. First-person, Second-person, Third-person to different Third-person.
 * Deus ex Machina, i.e. if the crazy events exceed the suspension of disbelief.

If you are willing to know spoilers, even though quite a lot can be gleaned from my sandbox, I could explain more in depth on my story decisions if you need context.

Finally, I would like to know your opinion of the connection of his current lore to his kit. I want to know if the expectations from the lore are sustainable for his kit. All parts of his kit are explained with lore, but the story is incomplete so context for some parts are spoilers.