User blog comment:WAFnuke/Shoanna,The Darkness's Grasp/@comment-16210885-20130923050043

Hello again~. Here again to comment.

-May I ask, does the innate mean that after I hit an enemy twice, the third hit will disable the target? If so, you're missing two things: how long the stacks last, and also the effect that the same target can't be affected by the disable within X seconds...

-The scaling for the Q is fine, but you forgot to define the Slow's strength. Also, the tether length may be a bit too long (just my opinion).

-Pitch Black makes me think of a blinding AoE...Shoanna has lots of and too much CC on one champion is...yeah...

-The E is a nice idea. But do you mean "free when it hits an enemy" or "free when it hits an enemy champion"?

- The R needs a duration, unless you purposeless gave it no duration in trade for that weaker DoT. Also, the scaling for the damage is wrong since Ults only have three rank scaling...

Also, if you really want to use the "formal" templates used on hte champion pages, use this link. I apologize, since you ask not to talk of templates, but I wanted to give one last reference for it...