User blog comment:Emptylord/Custom Champion - Nighthawk the Winged Fury (2013)/@comment-26815373-20160512044828

So I just discovered this guy and I think this is a really solid idea in some respects.

First of all, the ability icons are amazing.

A few things I might do a little differently, and since you ask for suggestions, I'm gonna tell you what. :3

I know you want this guy to be a man-bat creature, but TBH, I look at these icons and I think about the theme and all I can see is Vesper. I know he came out after you did this, but hear me out. Nighthawk here could be super awesome if he was a yordle. It's not a huge stretch either, since most yordles have rodent-like features. But the best part is that there is an implicit 'dark side' to them, as shows us. Similar to theMogwai / Gremlin dynamic, I can imagine that Nighthawk (as a bat-inspired yordle) is a yordle who's dark-side has completely taken over. He'd be larger than the other yordles (still much smaller than mega-gnar though) and scary, even though he still registers as yordle-ish in appearance.

'Lore'-wise, I'd say this is because in the remote past, all yordles had their cute form and 'mega' form, but over millennia they repressed these 'alternate forms' and / or their alternate forms were rendered dormant by lack of threats + yordle technology that reduced the need to rely on such traits. If that's the case, maybe Nighthawk is a very ancient yordle (implying vampiric qualities), and / or comes from a group of yordles that broke off from the main group, becoming a sub-species. (I particularly like the latter suggestion, as it would explain why he looks so different from the other yordles, nevermind his 'mega' form.)

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Ability-wise, my main suggestion (what I think would be cool) is if your 'One Fell Swoop' let Nighthawk perch on terrain, becoming invisible. Reactivating the ability would let him 'swoop' down and attack. This might sound silly, but I think it really captures that 'predator' feel, as well as being a unique ambush mechanic (rather than a generic 'goes invisible for a few secs'). On a side note, consider how could make her so much cooler if it's duration was longer (thus giving her a feeling of waiting in her web for prey) and letting her ambush passerby with proper foresight.

I also really like the echolocation idea, though your execution bothers me. I'm not sure if by 'reveal' you mean gain or just a  type of detection effect. I would much prefer the latter as it wouldn't grant targetability, but could still be used for gathering info and soft-countering stealth. I also think that maybe it should be a toggle effect that s Nighthawk, similar to what goes through for her Tremor Sense. My reasoning is two-fold. I mentioned the whole 'doesn't grant targetability, but gathers info, soft-counters stealth' bit, but also because it creates the feeling of being in darkness. This is important, as League obviously doesn't have a day / night cycle for this guy to capitalize on, so a 'nearsight' style effect would go a long way toward fulfilling his fantasy / enhancing his theme, as well as allowing for some super neat gameplay, IMO.

Just my thoughts though. Curious to know what you think. :o