User blog comment:FelixFortuneForsFortuna/Draco, The Burning Aegis./@comment-3391671-20161119020417/@comment-3391671-20161207170749

A great improvement in story. The old story did what it tried, but when you dive into the past like that, you create a wonderful intro. There are grammatical errors flavoured here and there, but that's nothing before the contents; they can be fixed with the help of a proofreader. You also finally gave personality to not only the father who was barely mentioned if ever and also the God of Flames Doltain, who was nothing but a husk of ash in my vision. That there is lore writing.