User blog comment:LordTenebros/Swain Fanfic - The Grand General/@comment-4911264-20121002193110

This is good. You have a good flow going on and (what i find to be the most important thing in fanfics and particularly many league fan fic writers screw this up entirely) its believable.

One thing though. In the 4th paragraph "who could Noxus well and with an iron fist". I believe that you mean "who could rule Noxus well and with an iron fist". If this is intentional for some reason or its a phrasing im not familar with then dont mind me.

You should really consider putting this in the fan fiction section on the official forums.