User blog comment:ClayHuang158/Jargan/@comment-26815373-20160324085516

So here's my two-cents:

Everything the people below me said about him being overloaded is true. I also want to add that just from an aesthetic point of view, his kit is ugly, IMO. That's not a slight against you though, just an observation about Jargan. Compare him to many of League's champs here on LoL Wiki, and you'll see that most champions have much simpler, cleaner ability text boxes. Granted, we've had to get wordy on a few champions (like ), but the guys here usually do a good job describing abilities succinctly.

With that said, I think you DO have something here. From a thematic / flavor standpoint, no champion in League currently qualifies as fulfilling the 'power-armor / super-soldier / future-soldier' fantasy. does his best cosplay of Space Marines with one of his skins, yes, and pilots a mech, but no champ thusfar nails down that particular identity.

Also, (and this might be strange advice) if all else fails, try gender-bending your champion - it might breathe some new life into your concept, and give you a new angle of attack. A dude in power-armor might be kinda 'meh' but a lady in power armor? Hmmm... I can already think of ...