User blog comment:QuantumRandomGenerator/Aokaria, The Blade That Shapes/@comment-3391671-20170125061553/@comment-3391671-20170206133230

I'm you are taking my comments just fine. I also apologize for my absence, especially in my last comment; I too had been busy till now, and will be from here on too.

Nonethelees, I've come to drop by with a few items to say in reply.


 * A champion with a focus on... "focus" is nothing new, but it can be explored, as you had done with the "points of interests." I can imagine that it would invoke the idea of someone dancing.
 * For the balancing side, the damage and heal are alright, but I would cut down that radius by half. 400 is large and would make the point of interest less a "point" and more a "field." IF you want Aokaria to be focused on being about positioning, reduce the radius size to 200 at largest.
 * Aside from range, the description of the Innate should contain everything, including scaling stats such as CD and damage.
 * Also when writing these descriptions, they should be about the champion (ie. Aokaria), not be an assumed first-person with the lack of a subject. Other games may follow a no-subject format for their description, but LoL does not.
 * For image files in the abilities, you only need the image file name ("Captive_Audience.png"), and none of the formatting (such as the " [[ "). The ability box is a bit wonky because of this misformatting.
 * Here is the format and code for what I refer to:

What it looks like= A Point of Interest spawns every seconds, lasting for 4 seconds. Over the duration, the Point of Interest will shrink to half its size.

If Aokaria steps on the Point of Interest, the Point of Interest will be consumed and allow his next basic attack within 5 seconds to deal   as  and heal for  of that value.

Points of Interest will prioritize spawning near a champion who hasn't moved around or a cluster of enemies. the code= A Point of Interest spawns every seconds, lasting for 4 seconds. Over the duration, the Point of Interest will shrink to half its size.

If Aokaria steps on the Point of Interest, the Point of Interest will be consumed and allow his next basic attack within 5 seconds to deal   as  and heal for  of that value.

Points of Interest will prioritize spawning near a champion who hasn't moved around or a cluster of enemies.
 * I feel that Steel Flow is more iconic for Aokaria's kit, thus it should be the Q, not Arching Sweep.
 * Nonetheless, I would simplify Arching Sweep to make it so the impact zone is uniform in its effects. It may sound nice & challenging to try to hit enemies in not only the sweetspot, but the center of it, but I would tone that down. Having the impact zone deal bonus damage and have an increased zone is enough.

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