User blog comment:Asfidyll/Sarabeth, the Angel's Sorrow/@comment-3391671-20171010030329/@comment-3391671-20171011020913

I could see that the kit was meant to fulfill the "set up, then execute" fantasy. However, I personally believe you may have taken it to one extreme, which is the focus of my worry. I've studied what I can about the kit, and you seem to be aware of what is in the kit, but as I mentioned, I find that even then Sarabeth relies too much on the Crowns to be asatifyingly interesting in gameplay imo. You go further with that through the damage enhancements with W and E, which I believe are flawed, as that is a lot of damage enhancements on one line of damage scaling. Imagine if there were a champ who had two abilities that enhanced a champion's basic attack, just in a different manner (let's take Sarabeth's idea where one enhancement is physical to magic damage, while the other increases it by a percentile). This kind of model is straightforward, yet not so intriguing...

On top of that, as you may know, when a champion has this high setup, high reward gig, they tend to have a very split case of balance. Because they have high reward when played right, a champ can be nerfed so that in the upper ranked games, they don't dominate so easily once those set ups are learned. As a result, their games are poor in the lower levels. This is the reason why I mentioned that at the least, there should be a way for Sarabeth to be able to fight without having so much focus on Crowns so that when atrocities happen, Sarabeth is not so tunnel-visioned on those Crowns and has other avenues to express themselves.

Last but not least, there are champs who have similar ways of working. is one that you mention, and is a good example. Even with her game, she has other ways to express herself. Surely, she could be made into what Sarabeth is, but RITO chose not to. is another of such champions, where she has that she plants on the field. She has even more need of setup, yet doesn't reach Sarabeth's level, though she is surely above. Now why is that? I am not going to go off like a broken record to answer that.

I look forward to an update of her lore. It surely felt detached, thus I too inferred that it may have been such the case that you made one, then the other, but I did not want to call out on that and instead be frank of what are the issues.

Otherwise, if you do make lore that is more on the fly, I recommend that you write something shorter, then some bullet points of your vision of who the champion will be outside what lore you've told. Lore that is long as yours will receive a lot of unnecessary backlash when you did not intend it to be furbished. But the bullets are necessary so that people won't call out for the lack of ideas.