User blog comment:Kind-Hearted-One/The Champion Description Project/@comment-25867286-20151012180928/@comment-26815373-20151107221810

It's not bad, but I think KHO is trying to focus more on the flavor and theme of Viktor and how his gameplay fulfills his particular fantasy. Currently you list a lot of his gameplay aspects and how they function mechanically. I mean, you can read the ones KHO has done, and then yours, and tell the difference. Rather than just stating what he does outright, tell a little story. For example, 'deals high burst damage' could be 'vaporizing enemies'. Notice how KHO with Thresh says 'chain up and drag helpless enemies' rather than 'he CCs them'. Little things like that make the difference.