User blog comment:Quantumyogi/Custom Champion: Rapid, the Twisted Tinkerer/@comment-18521310-20130923085125

Love the concepts, but you need to work on the numbers. Couple things I see right off:


 * The passive needs a "cannot apply to the same target more than once every ___ seconds." Otherwise build AS with 100% crit and suddenly you can insta-lock anyone.


 * 25% mana -> armor is obscene. Enemy has an AD-heavy team? That's okay, build 2k mana and have 500 bonus armor for an 83.3% damage reduction. Or go crazy and build 4k mana and have 1k bonus armor for a 90.9% damage reduction. Nobody has that kind of easy armor. Not even or.


 * Does bolt-gun damage minions? If not, that's a neat idea. If so, then wouldn't you never hit terrain when there are enemies in the path?

Otherwise, I like the concept. I'd certainly love to see more information (scaling, cooldown, mana cost, etc.). Maybe you wanna give a go at the character template and write him up?