User blog comment:Blackthifer/Shivaerus the Swordmage/@comment-3391671-20170117020855

I will be a little harsh with my criticism here, especially because it covers one of the many abused tropes that is commonly seen among custom champions: magic blades. But from what I see from this kit, while it doesn't excite, it does not bother me as it does not tread into areas that would make the kit boring.

Theme aside, onto the kit:
 * Modified basic attack damage is not a bad idea, although sports a bit of this. But it's only a bit, and aside from tweaking the numbers, the magic damage basic attack is alright.
 * One thing that needs explaining is how crits work with the magic damage. You say it works normally, but do you mean that it will deal extra damage or will it be simply 100% (plus crit damage modifier)?
 * For an assassin, a build-up passive may not be the best. Assassins with it such as and  only have it build over three stacks or a few seconds respectively.  might be a bit long. The idea of sharpening the damage though is a nice touch, especially for a fighter.
 * I've never heard of a slow being increased by but my instinct says "no" to it. Not that it is illogical (a sharper claw might as well induce a higher slow), but more about seemingly like something added in to grant Shivaerus a use for AD.
 * Champions who do not have a depleting resource require longer cooldowns. If it's not already above 10, it should be increased a bit more. Take example from existing champions with no resource. Especially for a pseudo-dash, I would lengthen it to 10 since would feel jealous.
 * I also wondered why you made the hook his Q. In most if not all champions, their Q is not only their main damage tool but is usually one of their iconic abilities aside from their ult.
 * W doesn't receive much comment in the way of criticism. It's simple and doesn't go outside the bounds. It helps him deal more damage to a desired target at the cost of lower damage on others for the duration. I do have questions though...
 * Why are the duration different between the target and others? I also felt that this spell would function better if it was a mark so that if the enemy dies while marked, Shivaerus would regain his damage on other enemies.
 * For an assassin, I would expect an on-kill effect, especially with this kind of ability. This links into the idea of using a mark, in that if the marked target dies... something happens! I would think an ability reset for True Focus, but I leave it to you.
 * Once again, I question the AD scaling, but I presume you'll be now answer that question. That aside, this ability too receives little to say since it fulfills what it does.
 * The name may need a change, since his innate already features the mention of "sharpness." It is redundant if an ability is also about the blade's sharpness.
 * I would expect that with some changes, this ability would work better as Shivearus' Q and the Hook would be his E. It fits in with how Q are often the offensive ability and is the utility.
 * There are ways to write out if an ult enhances the innate. For example, writing in the innate that the damage is increased by the given amounts based on the rank of Master Cloak. While I will admit that this ability is rather bland for what it does, it's not outrageous beyond recognition and I appreciate that. This can be done by implementing the following in the innate:  . It should look like this:
 * With the new stealth mechanics, you will need to update the stealth of this ability to outline if it's or, as I call them. From the looks of it, true stealth would be the only way to make this tool viable.

I would like to make comments on the theme, but once again, you explicitly said to judge on the kit. Thus, I withheld my urge to complain about themes and stuck to the mechanics. Just be reminded that I do have gripes about the underlining thematics of Shivaerus and if you want a few words about it, I am here.

I recommend looking at this to be able to use what the wikia has to offer in templates. Much can be done to make the abilities look clean. Just don't overdo it or else it will be over-decorated.