User blog comment:Odaswifteye/The Rework floor./@comment-4022742-20130807153209

Your conversation formatting is a bit weird:

"Master Yi cheerfully smiled at his companions. He noticed in one of the many lenses Heimerdinger passing by.

Master Yi: Professor!

Master Yi called out. Heimerdinger looked at Yi who walked towards him. Yi looked down on him, Natural given the height difference.

Master Yi: Did you get an update on your rework?

Master Yi asked. Heimerdinger frowned and shook his head.

Heimerdinger: I'm afraid the Riot staff has not updated me on the matter.

Heimerdinger said with veiled sadness in his voice. Master Yi got on one knee and planted his sword into the ground. He took off his goggles and looked at Heimerdinger

Master Yi: Do not worry. There will be a time where you too will be renewed. As long as we draw breath we have nowhere to go but forward.

Yi said confidently. "


 * Master Yi cheerfully smiled at his companions. He noticed in one of the many lenses Heimerdinger passing by. "Professor!" Master Yi called out. Heimerdinger looked at Yi who walked towards him. Yi looked down on him, Natural given the height difference.


 * "Did you get an update on your rework?" Master Yi asked. Heimerdinger frowned and shook his head. "I'm afraid the Riot staff has not updated me on the matter."Heimerdinger said with veiled sadness in his voice.


 * Master Yi got on one knee and planted his sword into the ground. He took off his goggles and looked at Heimerdinger. "Do not worry. There will be a time where you too will be renewed. As long as we draw breath we have nowhere to go but forward."

When you describe an action by a person, you basically give him focus in the story. Logically this means the next thing being said comes from them. So that way, there's no real need for all the "Heimerdinger: & Master Yi:" calls...

Despite that, it was a fun read! :D